My Walk Out was Interesting
My walk out was interesting
The sun was shinning
The palm trees were dancing
in a row
in a row
The day was bright
The sky was light
It was blue one day and grey the next
And yet it
always stayed blank
No white cotton balls anywhere in sight
No white cotton balls anywhere in sight
It was beautiful and delightful
But there was a touch of eerie
The wind was blowing
so roughly that my body would be pushed
It was a cool breeze forcing me to walk down
This pathway
This pavement
so roughly that my body would be pushed
It was a cool breeze forcing me to walk down
This pathway
This pavement
And the lark sparrows
were whistling
were whistling
The many different cars were loud
But
yet it was all so peaceful
you see blue and white twin engine piston planes up above
soaring the sky so gently.
you see blue and white twin engine piston planes up above
soaring the sky so gently.
So much movement here and
there
from one direction to the other
And yet no one was there
My walk out was interesting
But where was the speaker walking? It could have been anywhere--how can you bring a specific place into this?
ReplyDeleteWhat kind of trees, birds, vehicles? What did the winfd feel like--humid, dry, warm, chilly?
May I fix my poem by adding those specific details?
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